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I'd love it if you could give my feedback on this. I was just kinda bored and wanted to emphasis the importance of love. Oh, and the fact that love doesn't equate to romance.
This piece is super interesting, and I absolutely love the message at the end. The idea of the world is really cool too, and I'd love to learn more about these people of fire and ice.
I feel like it would make a more powerful statement if the entire ice army were to do what the narrator did. That would make stopping the fire army more reasonable, and it would be a great way to show how powerful solidarity also is.