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The witches woods

By: lianhabanana!


FREE WRITING



I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where the r a v e n s fly high,
and fairy folk  d a n c e  among the toadstools.

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where the s e c r e t s of the ancestors lie,
and the b o n f i r e s burn bright.

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where the w o m e n dance with crowns of wildflowers upon their heads,
and the black cats l u r k in the shadows. 

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where the w o l v e s howl at the full moon,
and the young witches are learning to use their m a g i c. 

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where the witches live in s m a l l cobble stone cottages, 
and all the vials of p o t i o n s are stacked on walls covered with vines.

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods,
where fairy l i g h t s hang from the branches of the trees above,
and when the n i g h t puts on her dress the woods come alive.

I come from the w i t c h e s  woods, 
where there is i n f i n i t e magic,
and the witches l a u g h t e r rang into the forest bright. 

I come from the w i t c h e s woods,
where the witches  y o u couldn't burn...

Still live...


And we are rising...


                           

Date Started: 03.06.2020
Date Finished: 23.06.2020
Word Count: 301
lowercase intentional. :)

 

Message to Readers

Feedback welcome and much appreciated!!!

Hope you guys like it! :)


Peer Review

The concept of the piece—about witches living far from civilization and getting stronger to retaliate—is really good, and the delightful imagery you've used throughout only makes it better!


There are majorly two aspects that you could delve deeper into here—you could talk about the witches' lifestyle, touching upon motifs like the significance of dancing "with crowns of wildflowers upon their heads" and their relationship with the black cats or wolves. You could also add in some backstory about the witches that were burned, as well as how the witches now are 'rising'.


Reviewer Comments

This is a beautiful piece and I'd love to read another draft if you write one. Do let me know if you have any questions! All the best with your writing :)