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if you read this thank you :’) i know stories don’t get much love often because of their length, so it means a lot to me <3
You've introduced two very different characters, with different personalities, and different goals in just a chapter (half chapter? tidbit?) and both are very interesting people! You can clearly see the two contrasting personalities and how they end up working together, and even foreshadowed a little. We get a clear and concise view into Helia's point of view, and I'm tempted to say that if this were from Rowan's POV, it wouldn't've worked nearly as well (though you could definitely pull it off :)). Your dialogue is smooth and seamless as well and definitely pulls the reader in. Most people on this site complain of prose being too hard to read, but you definitely break out of that stereotype! TL;DR, your character building is well built and well executed. You've managed to fit a remarkable amount of foreshadowing and even worldbuilding in this piece without it overshadowing your main focus: the characters. Your prose is very smooth and easy to read too, and the dialogue is an absolutely joy.
To be honest, other than the nitpicks i put in the highlights, I think this is good. this first chapter (?) serves more as an introduction to our main characters than an intro the world at large, and it works well with your style and with this story. we can get to the nitty gritty worldbuilding later, the most important thing is to establish your characters. in that aspect, i wouldn't change a thing!
you can see my descent into madness through the highlights. I hope this was helpful! what a nice intro to your story, i'm interested if you ever publish it anywhere!
all my suggestions are just suggestions and the person with the ultimate jurisdiction is you, the writer! take all i said with a grain of salt!~like always, if you have any questions about any of the points i mentioned, just ask me below!
also this is unedited so all the grammar mistakes are on me-