stunted skeleton of steel and carbon blue /
puffs of candy breath, broken child smiling /
two freckles peeking through folds of
abandonment, impish tears too grubby
too enchanting to turn blind eyes to /
stiff horse twirling like a pixie in love with
midsummer blossoms, rest baby fingers on
weary handlebars / under starry veils of
blushing clouds, shrill laughter masking
crimson sorrow reverberating /
polaroid picture of your child for ten
dirhams / feverish daughter at the carousel /
refrigerated breeze nipping nose at pink tips /
the feel of hot metal on chest, warm necklace
comforted by empty body /
baby don't cry /
this is a small dream / this is too cruel / this
is a solace for older days / for when crass sorrow
boards up in exhausted throat / no soprano
in ghost orchestra / medusa world cracked in half /
no turning melancholy to gold / no sleeping
these nightmares away /
Footnotes
an ode to childhood, carousel daydreams, and spring day.
did you like who you were? did you become who you wanted to be?
your writing technique STUNS me and everyone else on WtW, you really are an amazing writer. how are you able to spin such wonderful tapestries of words? teach me ;-; also- bogo shipda~~
that whole last six line or so, i think i finally realized that this poem was about and the footnotes sealed my fate. added a completely different layer to this already gorgeous poem. the way you write rather 'mundane' but still incredibly poignant scenes is *chef's kiss*. it makes me be glad to be alive at the same time as you <3 who knows, maybe i feel like cutting my tongue on stale peppermint again (don't steal that, i'm using that phrase for a poem in the future ;))
"no turning melancholy to gold" is it just me or was that a casual jab at your message box.
Oh. My. Gosh. How do you write something so stunning? This is wonderful! I would copy and paste my favorite lines, but I can't leave any of them out! Fantastic job! :D
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Avril
I love it! It's beautiful yet haunting, and kind of mysterious
Lone Wolf
your writing technique STUNS me and everyone else on WtW, you really are an amazing writer. how are you able to spin such wonderful tapestries of words? teach me ;-; also- bogo shipda~~
Aadit Pahuja
I nominated this one for June 2020 must-reads! Love it!
Eblinn
Your work is always carries this magical feeling to it, absolutely gorgeous!
Charisse Marison
This is stunning.
Like, dang, I have no other words. I'm speechless (which doesn't happen often)
Incredible job.
chrysanthemums&ink
that whole last six line or so, i think i finally realized that this poem was about and the footnotes sealed my fate. added a completely different layer to this already gorgeous poem. the way you write rather 'mundane' but still incredibly poignant scenes is *chef's kiss*. it makes me be glad to be alive at the same time as you <3 who knows, maybe i feel like cutting my tongue on stale peppermint again (don't steal that, i'm using that phrase for a poem in the future ;))
"no turning melancholy to gold" is it just me or was that a casual jab at your message box.
also i love your username too <3 blue sky, right?
sunny.v
why are your footnotes just so perfect? it just tops off the whole piece, wow. i aspire to be this level of aesthetic <3
Anne Blackwood
This is astonishing in a...quiet way? Idk it's just very well done.
Also, I became better than who I wanted to be. I became free. :)
mia_:)
Oh. My. Gosh. How do you write something so stunning? This is wonderful! I would copy and paste my favorite lines, but I can't leave any of them out! Fantastic job! :D