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The amazing imagery definitely moved me! I really love all the vivid adjectives and phrases you used (i.e. rose-gold dunes, vacant paradises), and also how they fit together so melodically (i.e. alliteration on "decay of dead dreams").
I think you could further explore the meaning behind phrases like "there is no love for children who do not cry" and "the wound does not hurt". Everything's really beautifully written, but I think that going a bit deeper into their meaning would elevate this piece even more.
Keep it up! I really enjoyed reading your writing!