naomi ling

United States

she/her
est. 6/14/20

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childhood reminiscence

June 14, 2020

FREE WRITING

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flap, flap. my grandpa’s rubber sandals 
snap at the linoleum tiles

the way my grandma does at my father. sometimes
i see them, hunching over untouched baozi:

father’s head bowed slightly, like a dandelion 
to the wind, as if a reprimanded child once more. 

mama sits at the table with bills for company, 
crisp white sheets with glaring bold numbers that
teeter higher than her creased forehead. 

grandma has her way of apologizing, papa tells me.  
in the morning i’ll come down to a plate of fresh baozi

steam still curling from milky white dough, (the sting of chives 
assaulting my senses,) and that’s how i know they’ve made up. 

auntie comes by sometimes, all legs and no curves (eat more
says grandma). she’s like a whirlwind, comes and goes 

as soon as i blink. she brings me lipgloss and peach gummies that
leave my tongue stinging and jaw sore: tai duo tong la. 

(too much sugar.) mama purses her lips when she talks 
about auntie — too rich for her own good, i hear her say. 

grandpa dips horsehairs in black ink and swirls poetry on 
musty parchment, each character a jumble of lines i do not know —

i can only wonder at what it means. grandma says
he’s wasting his time on poetry, that only

the richest men in the world have time to create. 
i know, one day, i will be one of them. 
a collection of jumbled memories from my second home in guangzhou, china. it's become a blur now and i wanted something to help me remember! 

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10 Comments
  • poetri

    thank you for the support. we hope to see you soon<3


    3 months ago
  • Sol noctis

    Heyo!!!!!
    Amaaazing piece....
    Just wanted to know why did you follow me out of allllll these greeeat writers out here??! Like I'm very amateurish.....


    4 months ago
  • And_The_Stars_Laughed

    Wow, this is beautiful!! Your descriptions are so vivid, and your diction is spot-on! Incredible job!!! :) Also, welcome to Write the World!!


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    ok chrysanthemums&ink (we call her chrys) is a meany and i won’t be outdone by that little devil (jk we’re besties lol) SO HERE’S MY LAST TIP: to like a piece, click that little star! like for your piece, there’s a four on the star (4 likes). just a tip since u saw my piece but i think u were still figuring things out haha.


    4 months ago
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    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    replying: aw of course, love <3 we’re glad to have a talent like you here, and i mean it. not often do we see such a wonderful debut piece. i sincerely hope to see you around more, dearest! again, don’t be afraid to come asking me for anything you need. :)


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    this is gorgeous!! “grandpa dips horsehairs in black ink and swirls poetry on / musty parchment, each character a jumble of lines i do not know “ wow. your imagery is amazing. guangzhou sounds lovely. also, thank you for the follow, dear! <3
    welcome to wtw! if you need anything at all, don’t be afraid to ask me. just drop a comment and i’ll try my best to help you. pro tip number one: when replying to someone else’s comment on your piece, you go to one of their pieces and comment “replying: *whatever you wanna say*”. that way, they get the notification! like i’m about to do
    replying: thank you for reading!! glad to hear that my imagery and diction weren’t as convoluted as i’d thought


    4 months ago
  • A Certain Type of Decisive

    This is beautiful, in such a way that children see the world- eyes wide and hearing everything. Great job and I can't wait to see what else you write!


    4 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    what a stellar debut! welcome to write the world, i hope you'll like it here <3. baozi really are good aren't they ;) your descriptions are absolutely amazing wow. :)


    4 months ago
  • outoftheblue

    I really love the nostalgia in this, when you talk about family here. and the addition of Chinese phrases in between.
    great to have yet another talented writer on here, so welcome to WtW!


    4 months ago