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You did not paint with blues//edited/hopefully improved//

June 17, 2020

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oh darling
words don't mean anything if they're empty
those beautiful words you plastered around my neck
now they sting
but wasn't it love?
but oh your words they painted beautiful galaxies
colours swarming my vision
deep purples,soft pinks,strong silvery colors
oh i should've known--i saw no blues
your touch on my cheeks
you laid delicate rose petals on my freckles
with such loving care
oh how beautiful you were
i guess i thought you could sing songs that could fill the sky forming clouds of melodies
oh you sang a beautiful song
but it vanished in thin air
oh love
you painted over my walls of dull greys
with passionate red
how beautiful it was
but I know now why you didn't paint them blue even though you knew it was my favourite colour
blue would let me see your words were empty
your breath cold
oh but you were beautiful
a beautiful that meant nothing 
I researched and found that the colour blue often represents truth.
Hi please let me know if this version is better.i added in the 2 lines before the last 2 lines.Just to make it more understandable. Did it help or am I crazy?let me know if I should edit it again please.I really like this piece so I want to improve it as much as I can.Thanks so much<3
edited version.

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7 Comments
  • sunny.v

    replying: oh my gosh I love These Two Windows!!! It’s beautiful, my favorite is probably Jesus in L.A.. what’s your favorite song from the album? :D


    6 months ago
  • inanutshell

    the last two lines definitely add to the piece! also love 'your words they painted beautiful galaxies/colours swarming my vision' great job!


    6 months ago
  • A Certain Type of Decisive

    Replying: Don’t stress it. I'm a human person who gets a little boost from the little orange circle in my notifications. I'm lonely and I like it when people talk to me, even if they all say similar things. It makes me feel important lol


    6 months ago
  • MazeRunnerGirl

    This is so pretty, I wish my poetry turned out like this! Keep it up! <3


    6 months ago
  • Mishthi Sharma

    This is stunning. loved it!!!


    6 months ago
  • Sol noctis

    You know, u always write amazing stuff...
    How do you manage to do it?!?


    6 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Wonderful! Thank you for taking my advice *is flattered* and for telling me about it! :D


    6 months ago