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I really liked how you managed to convey the emotions, feelings, and personalities of the characters through their actions and dialogue. I felt like I was able to look through a magnifying glass into their souls.
I think the part where Olivia sees her brother Tristan in her imagination was a bit confusing. Not to be overly critical, but I feel that the transition between Olivia's conversation with John to Olivia's imaginary conversation with Tristan was somewhat abrupt. I think you could further explore Olivia's indecision about whether she should commit to John through her conversation with Tristan. These are just a few suggestions I had in mind. :)
Overall, this was an awesome play, and I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great writing!