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don't know if this is obvious, but this is about people-pleasing. I tend to be a people pleaser myself and wanted to show it on an extreme level. Seriously, people, helping others is really important, but don't do that particular thing if it hurts you! <3
I'd love feedback on the formatting here :D
The fact that this is written as a collective shows that multiple people are being taken advantage of in the same system in a way that first or third person wouldn't show as well.
I would like to know more about the divide between the two groups, the abusers and the victims, how the line in drawn, how they go up against each other, etc.
This reminds me of nymph stories from Greek mythology, how tree nymphs would die if their trees were cut down, river nymphs couldn't wander too far from their source, etc. The piece handles the prompt well, but I think there's plenty of room to get more specific on the struggles the reservoir girls face so that the reader can relate more to what they are going through.