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So, our church started holding in-person services this past week, since restrictions in our area have been lifted enough.
I think that using this POV really adds to the piece, because the church is one body and we are united. So I think that this piece has more of an impact because it has this collective perspective.
If this were an essay it would be cool to focus on different people or groups in the room (those of us who are children fidget...one of us...) But since it's a poem, I think it's good the way it is.
-This is really good!! Great work!!