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It's quite interesting! It's like one of those interesting stories, that might not have a super out-there storyline, but is still really interesting and enjoyable. (I like those stories)
There are a few lines that are unneeded, and some incorrect grammar, but overall, I think it's pretty good!
Great job! This is really good (I can see a little of the Bachelor in it :D) Keep Writing <3