batman_is_a_cracker

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Don’t let anyone dictate your words.

The Illusion Of Control | Chapter 1, The Crack of Dawn

June 6, 2020

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Chapter 1
The Crack of Dawn

My back is soggy.
I’m wearing three layers of clothing
yet I still feel the cool wetness of the ground
tickle my nerves in the most bothersome way possible.
I spent nearly an hour haphazardly swiping away
just enough snow
so I could have my sanctuary back.

It’s a beautiful little clearing in the forest.
It looks like the trees took a break.
Like they rested for a bit before planting their seeds
all around that area of rest.

I found it while wandering as a child
running away from my lessons
like usual
like any royal child would, honestly.
I stumbled upon it after getting lost
and ate the fruit upon the trees until 
I had the sense to retrace my steps.
(I wasn’t the sharpest child.) 

I now come here to think,
when things back home get too
suffocating.

And I came here today
at the crack of dawn
to do just that.

Except we had been hit by 
an unexpected snowstorm overnight.
So while I normally would be watching the sun
slowly rise in a shimmering design
through the gaps in the trees,
I had to painstakingly clear 
a suitable resting place instead,
making me miss the golden hour.

Currently, I lay 
partially in the snow
partially in the cold grass
fully soaked and freezing,
much more distressed than I was 
before I even came here.

I don’t know why I bother anymore,
it’s not the same
without Gillian.

So I give up on finding peace
and start to trek back home
to the palace.
 
Whooo-Hooo! The first chapter of my novel(?) is finally published on Write the World! I hope y'all liked it. 
I have at least 10 chapters written already but because they're pretty short, I'm gonna start with publishing the first three and going off of the reception of that for how I'll release the others. 
Side note: some of the chapter names are relevant, most of them are not, so don't except good chapter names lol
As usual: like or comment if you liked the piece and have a nice day :)

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5 Comments
  • ANSON REYNOLDS

    "tickle my nerves" agh that's SUCH a good way to describe that! And "It looks like the trees took a break./Like they rested for a bit before planting their seeds".
    Anyway, I saw your sonnet competition thing and I was like, wellllll. you can't write a sonnet without reading the story. So I'm now here to binge your story XD It's already awesome :)


    3 months ago
  • Busssy.Beee

    fave lines are, "yet I still feel the cool wetness of the ground; tickle my nerves in the most bothersome way possible." :) i am loving this (goes on youtube to play the mcdonalds ad :P)


    3 months ago
  • Sanjana Sunilkumar

    Replying : And hey, did you just delete all your previous stuff you wrote on WtW? Cos, I don't remember reading these before!


    7 months ago
  • Jason_claire :)

    Here we go part one, imma get to ten at some point


    8 months ago
  • elliem

    Review on the way! :)


    9 months ago