Peer Review by Two Heartbeats (United States)

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Museum of Dreams

By: A Certain Type of Decisive


FREE WRITING

I once had a dream of an massive museum
One thousand rooms, branching and looping
I dreamt of tourists hiking and marching
One thousand strangers in one thousand rooms
Kindergarten classrooms and long office hallways
Barren retail stores and coffee shops
Nurseries and hospital rooms
Labrotories and mortuaries 
And every single room, you have been there before
Or maybe you've seen it in pictures
But you can’t quite remember
One thousand tourists walked in and all walked out
You and I explored together
Sitting in tiny chairs
Watching raindrops chase each other down the greenhouse glass
Walking hallways that seemed to stretch into infinity
I dreamt of a museum
Of one thousand rooms


Message to Readers

I'll hike up this mountain under one condition: tell me whether or not you're a vampire. Oh- really? Okay, nevermind. I changed my condition: we have to get frozen yogurt afterwards.


Peer Review

I live near a city full of museums so it's easy for me to conjure an image of "Rooms I've been in before" The theme of 1000 strangers and rooms leaves so much to the imagination.


I think you could elaborate the ending. You and I explored together sitting in tiny chairs. You bring up a relationship and I think you can follow through with it.


Reviewer Comments

Regardless, amazing job!