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I admire the extent to which the author uses all types of imagery. The author does not only use visual imagery, but also auditory, olfactory, and gustatory imagery. This holistic approach truly makes the reader capture the atmosphere of the text or sitting in the restaurant him/her self.
The writer explicitly focus on culture and history. The author makes it clear that the setting of the piece is India. He or she uses words such as 'Baba' or 'Aloo' which may be foreign to the reader but which the author gives the meaning of in the footnotes. The author also makes it clear that this piece has a historical undertone, as is noted in the italicized paragraph towards the end of the piece. The author takes food writing to another level in this piece. He or she describes how food is so much more than what we eat without having to directly state this. Through her recollection of the tips her mother gave her about cooking, such as how an onion should be prepared, and the description in the hook about how customers come together and dance to cultural songs, the author expresses how food can both bring people together and create memories.
If the writer were to expand on one part of the piece, I would recommend discussing the history of this restaurant , such as its owners and why they built it. I would also love to hear some background information to the narrator. Why is this restaurant or the meals it produces so important to the storyteller? Is it a hope and dream of the narrator to own a restaurant?
Yes, the beginning definitely makes me bite. The author utilizes multiple types of figurative language in her piece, but primarily focuses on imagery in the beginning of the piece. This is a huge part of food writing, and extends the idea that food is so much more than what you swallow. It travels the body, and simplicity impacts all parts. While the customers are waiting for the food in eagerness , they begin to dance. Just by this one plot line alone, the writer pulls on multiple senses, such as hearing and smell.
The fuel of this piece is definitely the cultural and historical aspects of it. If you are to edit, I would not remove any part that takes away from the diversity of the story. Keep taking those of us who are foreign to the culture described in the piece on a journey in which we discover new aspects!
This is an amazing piece. I would honestly recommend making it into a story, as I could definitely see this being the first chapter of a book or the backstory of a historical, non-fiction novel! Keep up the great work!