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I love how seamless this is. Although you're dealing with several different topics (family history, family future, the pie recipe itself, unity as a world as a whole), you handled them all like a pro!
I love how you connect this pie to both your family and our world as a whole. Not only do you bring your family history together in the pie, but you also bring in all the continents. This really made an impact on me, especially during times like these, when we must remember that we are one world and must stand together.
Perhaps you could experiment with the above idea further--how does the pie connect you to others in a world that is going through massive change and hardship right now? How are you standing with them even though you are on the other side of the world?
Or another idea: how have these recipes shaped your family and its traditions? Are there any specific memories you have of these recipes that could give even more meaning to them?
Oh. My. Gosh. The beginning! That first sentence just pulled me in right away. It showed me that the stakes were high for you as you started to make this pie.
This is a really good start! Taking one pie and showing us how it connects you to your family and to the rest of the world is an absolutely phenomenal idea. Keep working hard, and this will turn out to be a really special piece!
I love how you kept with the theme of the competition so well. Your piece, although about the pie, is truly about your relationship with the past and your relationship with the rest of the world. I'm excited to see where this takes you!