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Hey! I would love some reviews on this!
i love how this shows the bigger picture, but is still so detailed. you just brought to life the events, and explained how this meant so much to you. i know that this is just the first draft, but that's where we all start, and sometimes with the first draft there isn't a whole lot of editing that needs to be done.
this piece really shows how this food means so much to you, and how it shows your family.
i would have to say family. because you showed how your perspective can change. when you were little you thought your mom was holding out on you, but now you can see how see was saving it so that when you could have it, it would be special.
how you feel now. you mostly focus on the past, and just give a glimpse of the present. i would like to now how this changed you, and what it now means for you.
i think it's great, maybe reword it, but that's not 100% necessary.
you picked a great moment, and i think you could go far.
this is amazing, i just have one favor to ask. would you please review my piece for this contest?