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I found this subject matter incredibly intriguing, and this piece has been written in such a beautifully precise way. As a British atheist, I was unfamiliar with this subject, and I really appreciated how you explained yourself and your rituals, in a way to not seem condescending or presumptive, and I applaud you for this!
This work demonstrates faith and spirituality in a very bookend format, with food as the focus point. However, it is very clear to see that this passage is about much more than "crackers and juice", presenting instead somewhat of a spiritual awakening.
I would have loved to know more about the significance and pride associated with that first time eating the crackers at communion, as i think this could have really rounded up the whole text.
The title is very compelling, however I find the opening sentence a little unenthusiastic and sub-par, which really does not pay great justice for the remainder of this piece! I may have tried to open with a shorter sentence, as appose to a very long statement, including the speech. I would likely have shifted the speech to the second or even third sentence.
I really do applaud you on this piece, and I can tell you are an excellent writer. I have every faith you will go far with this gift. Keep writing and doing what you love!
Beautiful. Thank you for this insight into your faith and development!