Samina

India

Common girl with uncommon dreams.
Perspiration always turns to perfection :-)
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Yoga enthusiast
Hopeless Romantic
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Message to Readers

I am making a short film on this poem so feedbacks are appreciated. PLEASE.

मेला में दोबारा l PART 2 (PLEASE GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACKS CUZ I WANT TO MAKE A SHORT FILM ON IT)

June 22, 2020

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Chandni light fell on us, we stared in each other’s eyes
The world seemed unknown; we were in the sky.
I felt dizzy, was it the ride or your presence
I felt butterflies in my stomach for seconds.
Then my eyes fell on the gun shooting game,
The big teddy bear, we had to aim
I held the gun in my clinking hands,
Mauve with the turquoise mixed color of blue sky 
Suited my hand, 
Then,
I felt the warm breath rub my face
He wrapped his arms around my shoulders, targetting the goal.
We were 5 cm far apart, oh my soul...
I wondered was this game a reason for us to come close.
The trigger release from my hands
And My heart was pumping, beating, triggering.
Dhadak, Dhadak, Dhadak
My hands were shivering,
We won the teddy
I was lost in this magical world, Is it my fantasy?
 
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10 Comments
  • outoftheblue

    wow, i'll definitely be looking out for this :)
    and thank you sm for the wishes, and you're not late at all!


    23 days ago
  • Ollie Octopus

    I love this poem! Making it into a film is a good idea!


    23 days ago
  • Melika :)

    This is such a beautiful piece! I love itttt


    24 days ago
  • WinterBerry

    I really like the sensory description in this and I think you should definitely continue this!! It seems like a very intriguing storyline.


    about 1 month ago
  • /Cinder/

    I have something that I am trying to tell some people and you are one of them.
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/170235/version/336099
    plz look at it and give it a read


    about 1 month ago
  • Mishthi Sharma

    LOVED IT!!!


    about 1 month ago
  • Jasmine khawar

    This was also beautiful and dreamy like part 1
    LOVELY!!<3


    about 1 month ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    This poem transports me 'mela' and life before corona!!


    about 1 month ago
  • Fatima Zahra

    "My heart was pumping, beating, triggering.
    Dhadak, Dhadak, Dhadak" very delicate situation described beautifully.


    about 1 month ago
  • thelostone

    Woah. This is....I don't even have proper words to describe how this really is. But if I have to describe then all I can say is that this is absolutely mesmerizing. I loved it!


    about 1 month ago