she/her | high school | wasian | enfp

i sip inked tea in someone else's garden

(formerly ★ white mountains ★)

Message to Readers

this piece is for elliemccul’s contest— go check it out!

not my favorite but I enjoyed writing it. feedback appreciated as always!
ignore the title. I have no idea what I was thinking. my 3 am brain doesn’t really work so if anyone has any title suggestions, lmk in the comments :)

the remnants of past love #rollthedice1

May 28, 2020


hunched over, shadowed by the dim light of the kerosene lamp
he submerges the feathered quill in ink

the ghost of honeysuckle kisses still tingle on your lips
burn another candle down, let melted wax coat your numb fingers
while he waxes poetic / he revels in the tortured artist persona
if only you had known you were just another muse to observe from behind glass walls

he gazes into the distance, expression inscrutable
his eloquence is limited to calligraphy on papyrus, his emotions are juvenile
hardened sugar water to soothe the dull ache of an unfeeling heart

you quell the rising wave of emotion, wall of red brick and mortar
after all / you are untouchable within this fortress
beneath every polished facade lies another broken soul 
but your mask has metamorphosed to a second skin

stroke the cultured stubble, leathered skin and rough burlap
his looking glass is blackened with streaks of oil

you will traverse the deserts, withstand the blazing sun
let the wind whip your eyes, the salty sand sting your tongue
if it meant you’d see him / holed up in his tent of stained canvas
and he’d watch you 
strike a match to spark a conflagration in the diminutive pit he calls a fireplace
toss in the pillowcase all but saturated with the tears you shed for him
and let it burn

feather (feathered), honeysuckle, quill


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  • sunny.v

    i wrote about you in my appreciation post!:

    6 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Replying: Oh lol if there's still something you're wanting to ask, you can and I'd just comment it I guess.

    6 months ago
  • Emi

    The vocabulary in this is great! I'm still trying to figure out all the symbolism.

    6 months ago
  • mia_:)

    Also, you can definitely take credit for my newfound imaginary donut obsession! I think you intensified sunny's too!

    6 months ago
  • mia_:)

    Replying: *facepalm* Sorry! I totally forgot about the notification thing! Glad you still saw it. I totally forgot. I've been kinda scatterbrained the past few days lol . . .

    6 months ago
  • mia_:)

    Replying: So, I kind of asked about it, but I didn't mention who I was wanting to collab with so yeah. I honestly don't think my parents will be on board :( much sad! It's just the whole like strangers on the internet thing (not that I think that AT ALL about you! <3<3) But yeah. Sorry! You know what could work? You wrote that peer review to me and we can just collab in there. That way all the convo will be in the same place? I hope we can figure something out! <3<3 :)

    6 months ago
  • WinterBerry

    This is amazing!! It's a wonderful entry for a competition!!

    6 months ago
  • ElsaRee

    Stunning!! I am breathless!

    6 months ago
  • bambiamby

    this is... i don't even have the words! its just so beautiful! Each stanza flows and creates such amazing imagery!

    6 months ago
  • mia_:)

    Color me amazed! I love how eloquently you write this and how seamlessly you incorporated the words! This is amazing!

    6 months ago
  • sunny.v

    i agree with Anne, i really held my breath for most of this. your writing....i never forget how clear and emotive it is!!

    6 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    "while he waxes poetic / he revels in the tortured artist persona / if only you had known you were just another muse to observe from behind glass walls" haha for some reason i feel called out. favorite lines and dang i think that was unintentionally relatable. the way you play with words is amazing as usual! good luck on the comp!

    6 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    This is jaw-dropping, rereading, breathtaking good

    6 months ago
  • elliem

    Oh my gosh!!! This is so gorgeous!! Thanks so much for entering, this piece is absolutely beautiful.

    6 months ago