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Message to Readers
reediting some old pieces. I did start a story--snippets of scenes at least--but no fully developed plot yet. lmk if you'd be interested in reading some more "sneak peaks" of a story that prob won't come to be (you never know tho)
This was originally for a user-hosted contest/prompt--man i miss those.
have a great night! or day, depending where you are ;)
I really liked the idea of firefly fairies, and I loved your vivid descriptions. I feel like they really convey the magical scenery and wonder of Henry and Ellie at seeing them.
I know this a short snippet in response to a prompt, but it would be awesome if you could expand it into a full-blown story. For instance, you could add more vivid imagery as the scene progresses, so readers are caught up in the mystery and ultimate awe at the firefly fairy valley.
From what I've gathered, Ellie and Henry live in a castle in this fantastical, magical world. I'd love to read more about them! Keep up the awesome work! ^-^