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This is a very romantic and sweet short poem. You use some beautiful star imagery - which is a personal favourite of mine - and your similes are to die for.
I like that the poem is short - it adds to the simplicity of the love he has for her, it reads like a stream-of-consciousness poem and that style fits perfectly.
This has great potential! I noticed a couple of grammar issues but they can be quickly amended - and I may even be wrong, if I am please correct me!