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"she dances in sync to the wind" i like very much. It tells a lot about that character, as well as the other lines that give really well visualization.
I'm intrigued on what is happening. She seems like a free spirit that loves to dance. On the other hand, I don't know much about the 1st persons point of view. The character who "can't help but gaze". I think it would be cool to continue your poem by going by the girls perspective, "why is this person gazing at me?"
All in all, I thought this piece was amazing and would love to see what you may add to it. Elaborating a bit on who's perspective were reading from could bring more interest on the two characters together.