Happy butterfly

South Africa

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Lover of the ocean
Nature
Optimist
Marvel
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Message from Writer

Hello;)I love swimming, I'm literally a fish.So naturally I love the ocean.I love all nature and animals.Nature is a gift that we don't appreciate as much as we should.
I love reading,writing poems,songs,acting and sports.Also I'm learning the ukelele.
I only started writing poetry like a month ago when quarantine started and found out I loved it.So please friendly criticism is very appreciated so I can learn because I'm just writing what I like or think is right-very inexperienced!
Im a huge people person,love people-people are beautiful and so complex.I'm a huge extrovert.I'm an optimist.
*being sad is a waste of time*
*don't forget people care about you*
*remember your worth*
*Never let anyone make you feel inferior*
;)

Swan in my stomach

May 23, 2020

FREE WRITING

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You slipped your hand in mine,
I felt something in my stomach
No-not butterflies
they're too subtle a feeling.
It was something like a
Swan
Yes,a swan flapping inside my stomach,
Making me giggle.
Your eyes not the blue of the ocean,
Instead a freeing blue of the sky.
Your smile made my heart flutter out my chest to wrap its wings around yours,
As you wrapped your love around me with the words
" I love you."
I felt the fog tickle my ears,
As we walked up hills in the sunrise,
But that was it,
It wasn't fog,
I was flying,
My head in the clouds.
I should've known this couldn't have been real

Was that an unexpected ending? lol.I go through phases when I finish a piece. the stages are: yay!.I hate this,I love this ,meh,then unexpected.
Im currently in the i hate this stage but I wanted to publish it.In 10 minutes if I still hate it,I'll take it down.
Anyways thanks for the support <3

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11 Comments
  • kealoha

    Aww I love this so much. Very creative <3 So relatable too!
    Replying: No problem! I love your work so much :)


    7 days ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    This is so creative!!
    Replying: Oh, you're so sweet. I have now alerted my brother that we have a triplet.


    7 days ago
  • Samina

    When I read this, I felt what you described. Good job! I loved the description.:-)


    7 days ago
  • MarvelousMarshmallow

    YOU ONLY STARTED A MONTH AGO?? HOLY MOLY YOU’RE SO GOOD


    7 days ago
  • Two Heartbeats

    Replying: Heyyy. Thanks for the extended comment. You don't have to apologize at all. I love all the feedback and responses I get ad it makes my day. The stanza: When the boy has been harmed the mind looks for a home is a personal touch the follows some of my life experience and more importantly enhances the story of my parasite. Poetry is meant to be questions so I love that you did.


    8 days ago
  • AutumnRain

    You’re way too harsh a critic on yourself! This is very good :)


    8 days ago
  • Tapasya

    Heyo!!
    It's amazing!!! Why would you hate it...


    8 days ago
  • Two Heartbeats

    Replying: That made my morning. Thank You


    8 days ago
  • van gogh's girl

    Whoa. I like the twisted metaphors


    8 days ago
  • Two Heartbeats

    Really amazing job.
    Replying: you said you were gonna read my piece again and I believed you. Not out of my ego but you have a passionate generous soulful heart. I see it right here in your writing.


    8 days ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Wow! I love it! Beautiful, poetic work x3


    8 days ago