CrazyNinjaKid

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Message to Readers

Who speaks Irish here??

a athair

July 9, 2020

FREE WRITING

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ruptures my fragile soul,
rhythmic peace distorted, 
shallow breathless gasps,
dread filled introspection's awakened, 
wildly roams previewing visions,  
echos repeating, over and over, 
mind whirling, intimate voices,
violent nightmares, triggered painstakingly,
harshly crush the heart-wrenching memories, 
afraid, traumatised, painfully alone, 
floating like a child's sail boat,
drowning in a lost sea of confusion.

acceptation of the final stand
heart pounding, pound after pound
shattering fiercely, glass of a million pieces,
risks unleashed, jeopardised, threatening self,
following heart, ignoring mind,
defying weakness, disregarding soul,
be a saviour, a want to be warrior,
all for this one person,
for the loyalty wouldn't be returned.

 
First Published: 22/05/2020
Word Count: 103

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17 Comments
  • birthdaycandles

    cool piece! I recognise the title from irish - it means father, right?


    3 months ago
  • pineapples

    Replying: thanks for saying that :)
    (I edited and republished it because I read through it for like the tenth time and just now realized that the grammatical errors were HEINOUS.)


    3 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Contest Results are Out! https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/178685/version/356929


    3 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: I really loved your piece for prompt 4 and you will probably place but you have unpublished or deleted it :( Its called you deleted the light!


    3 months ago
  • Vinter Vejen

    Just choose any of mine :)


    4 months ago
  • Vinter Vejen

    Would love a review swap!!


    4 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Thanks for the entry however the link you sent doesn't work :( Would you mind resending. So sorry !


    4 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    :O


    4 months ago
  • Ahsan Nizaam

    Loyalty is almost never returned. Very relatable and awesome choice of words


    4 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Created My 50 follower contest :)) Would love if you'd have a look ! Thanks for the advice!!
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/168550/version/332138


    4 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Thank you so much!!


    4 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Any suggestions for prompts?


    4 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    This piece is amazing!!


    4 months ago
  • fatpanda

    replying: yeah sure!


    4 months ago
  • Destiny_the_writer

    Felt this deep in my soul. Great job


    4 months ago
  • Busssy.Beee

    This is really good!


    4 months ago
  • fatpanda

    hello, i'm sorry but i'll have to disqualify this piece. i don't think you've used science at all in this poem, and i was looking for entries written from only a scientific point-of-view, which, unfortunately, this entry is not. however, you're free to enter something else under the same prompt if you wish! :)


    4 months ago