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If this piece is well received, I'll write the next two parts. This is a WIP! Feedback greatly appreciated.
I like a lot of them, but the first sentence was really good
Hard to explain- kind of nostalgic, wishing I lived in a small town lol.
What time period is it supposed to be set in? It doesnt seem contemporary, or from that long ago. I dont think the ambiguity takes away from the story, but you could drop a few more hints.
This is really good! It caught my attention because I am also working on a story about a summer in a small town, though im not very far yet. Anyways, keep it up, I definitely want to read part 2!