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this is such a meh piece and i'm hoping it gets swept away but!! for miss chrysanthemums&tea, 'tis for you!!
THIS WAS FOR ME??? This beautiful piece of work??? I- I was honestly speechless for a minute or two, i almost cried. I was not expecting the beautiful imagery on top of the lyrics of CROWN. The song was beautifully woven in with your golden words.
I think sometimes the stanza transitions are a bit awkward in the beginning are a bit awkward, but it's totally understandable. Maybe you could add a little more about how the narrator stopped thinking of their horns as 'horns' and more as a 'crown'? Maybe their a little more on their thought process as it changes, like a little extra between the 6th and 7th stanzas? Otherwise, (nitpicks btw, as that's all I'm able to make with your beautiful writing), this is so beautiful and *tears up a little bit*.
back when you thought my name was chrysanthemums&tea lol. I think my jaw dropped when i saw this in your profile, was not expecting this TT. Haha I'm glad I at least tried to return the favor, although I doubt my piece could trump this masterpiece. Beautiful work, and if you have anything to say about any of the points I've made, feel free to message me about it!