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What drew me in was how one action seemed to have so much finality.
The subtle allusions and references, especially in the descriptions, were what I thought carefully controlled such that it reveals the story slowly. Details such as "draped in crimson", "gilded steel", "Gods", suggested to me a traditional wedding.
I liked how you revealed her age at the end, incorporating it smoothly into your prose such that it didn't interrupt the flow of storytelling.
I was somewhat unsure about "the broken shadow of her Gods with dyed skin and burning eyes", not sure whether it reflected her emotions (tearing up) or it was due to the morning sun.
I wasn't too sure what the title was referring to - something will be broken, it seemed. I didn't know what was being broken, or will be broken, partially because "broken" referred to two times in your piece, and also because there wasn't an item presented as a whole thing that could be broken.
I feel that your message behind it is pretty solid, so well done! You don't have to take my comments if you don't agree with it.
I loved how you spoke about an important issue (child marriage), and I feel that this piece will definitely impact those who read it. Best of luck in the competition!