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really love the open book metaphor used here. also the rhyming lines here are used really well, at times they sound like limericks! was surprised to know that this was inspired by your dog - this is a great take on something that started out as small as that! i don't think you exaggerated it here, i really like it.
As it is, I think it's good. but I think more can be said here about the girl if you choose to fictionalise her- she lies but what are her motives and goals? and also maybe the persona's relation to her could be included as well. i think this piece can benefit by delving deeper into something like a character study, by fleshing out the girl more.
this caught my attention but what really solidified it was finding out this was inspired by your dog. haha really love it, pls write more about your dog and say hi to her for me if you can!! :)