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With many of my pieces the feedback given is something I try to incorporate into the next one because I am not one to republish pieces often. However this piece is one I would absolutely love all the feedback you can give! I don't write short stories by choice, it is not my preferred style and I don't know much about writing them however my school assessment coming up is short story writing which is slightly worrying for me. This is about gender expectations in quite an extreme way. Before you comment on me appropriating or mocking even another culture, both of my parents are from India and I visit there often. This is not the reality there for most I would like to think, and mine is very far from it. It is just a story that I wrote about an idea I find confronting. Thank you!
This was so sad. But I loved the way you outlined the thought processes of the character.
This is fine.
I sincerely hope these kind of things don’t happen in India. You did a good job of writing this in a realistic way. Congrats!