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Message to Readers
forgot the olfactory! :p
Okay, this piece was incredible. I absolutely loved the description. You painted such a vivid picture of the world; you really have a gift. The idea of this piece is also really intriguing, and the ending was really emotional.
I highlighted a few areas where you could improve, but overall, I liked this piece stylistically a lot.
Congrats on winnning the contest, and sorry that this is a bit late.