elliem

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Saltwater Teacup #Howdy

May 10, 2020

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Little crystal baby blue,
    Darling, you can sparkle too.
        Glisten as they wipe your tears,
            Wipe off your careful veneer.
                Darting through the ocean reeds,
                    Slithering at rapid speeds.
                           A tumbling, bumbling waterfall
                                Could never top your midnight call.
                            Through the sweet honeysuckle night
                        We watch the owls take to flight,
                    Slip through clouds of silver grey
                And never sleep 'till break of day.
            When twinkling dawn comes up again,
        They'll crawl into their cozy dens,
    As roosters stir and robins sing,
And lift their heads from sleepy wings,
    We'll plunge into that icy blue,
        We'll tell the tale of me and you.
            Let the seaweed wrap and slither.
                And along the sand, I felt you thither.
                    Hold me in those arms so tight;
                        Let currents carry us to sea tonight.
                            We'll laugh among the lightning storm
                        Since all we are is safe and warm
                    As long as you're you, and I am me
                We can swim all day with our friend, the sea
            And swim we will, 'till dusk wraps us up
        In its anemone bed, its saltwater teacup
    Though we will meet again the next day
To close our eyes and feel ocean's spray.
This is for @batman_is_a_cracker's competition, #Howdy. I didn't even know what I was writing about while writing this, but I like the flow and I've never really written a poem this way, so hopefully, it is good. Make sure to check the comp out! Thanks ​@batman_is_a_cracker for the inspiration.

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7 Comments
  • sunny.v

    wow. this is just...wow. breathtaking, really, and oh so lovely!


    6 months ago
  • chrysanthemums&ink

    congrats on making it to the must reads! wow, this piece really is absolutely breathtaking. i'm kinda speechless wow. absolutely amazing work, you're too good <3


    6 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    ab-so-lute-ly gorgeous poetry. The formatting is the cherry on top. I agree with all the other comments here. You are amazing. Keep on writing :D


    6 months ago
  • Stone of Jade

    This is so amazing! Everything about this is beautiful and so creative! I can't even find any good words to describe how this made me feel! Congrats in the contest!


    6 months ago
  • ~wildflower~

    I LOVE every single aspect of this piece! The rhythm, the rhyming (it flows SO well), the imagery, the descriptions, the name, the message, the format.... everything. Wow. Just wow. It’s so comforting and beautiful. So creative and utterly, perfectly beautiful. I can’t wait to read more amazing pieces from you!!


    6 months ago
  • delete

    You know what? I’m not even going to enter because this piece is too precious to go up against- no I’m joking (but not about the precious part). This is fantastic, Ellie! Once again you’ve managed to impress me with your writing skills. The rhyme scheme is just perfect and the perfect zigzag shape of the poem is so satisfying to look at, mimicking sort of water rapids or ripples. I can tell you’re talking about the ocean in the point of view of birds. That’s interesting because we see birds as a sky creature, so their take on the contrasting ocean is something intriguing to explore.


    6 months ago
  • batman_is_a_cracker

    Howdy. Thanks for entering. Reading poetry always takes me to another place entirely, it's like I stop being myself for a moment. This piece really gave off that vibe for me, great job!


    7 months ago