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It needs...something. I'm not sure what it is though. More imagery? An actual rhyme scheme? Make it shorter?

Golden Boy

May 8, 2020

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4
It's hard
Hard to be
Hard not to be
Hard to be everything
Hard to be nothing

You cannot escape it
Everyone's looking to you
And you can't freeze up
Because what will they think of you?
You have to say something
You can't shrink back
They're staring at you, all hopeful
You seem to always have a plan

You're the golden boy
With expectations on your back
A picture perfect mask
To hide the sweat, blood and tears
Have to stand straight and tall
They can't know your secrets at all
You can't block the noise
Of people crowding around you
'Cause they think you know all the answers
Apparently you can do what matters
Can't avoid your fate
You're the golden boy

You're causing girls to stare
Wherever you go
And the teachers praise you
'Cause they know
What you can do
You're the one with ultimate power
The prodigy, role model
And your legacy grows every hour

You're the golden boy
With legends to create
Your ancestors are remembered forever
You gotta do something great
'Cause your family is asking you
"What will you become?
You gotta do something awesome."
And you know you must
You have no choice
No voice
'Cause you're the golden boy

Can't taint
Can't faint
Gotta paint
A picture, worthy of praise
If you don't
Consequences
Are worse than just disgrace
Can't let
The pressure get to you
You're looking down on them
When you want to be equal
They're looking up at you
And you know it's impossible
To ever be normal
Because

You're the golden boy 
Your sister's beauty is the talk of the town
Your older brother's got crowds following him around
You're friends with the school's most popular guy
Your mom and dad are in love and it's just fine
But you know
Inside
Everyone's wondering
"What will he become?
It's gotta be something awesome."
And you hear
The whispers growing louder
Are those envious looks on their face?
They bury you beneath flowers
And towers
Of praise
They crush you
Suffocate you
You fall to your knees
And all these expectations
You drop
Will it ever stop
Can it ever stop
Does it ever stop
And you scream out loud
"I don't want to be the golden boy!"

...

You're the golden boy
Can't avoid your fate
You didn't have any choice
There is no escape
Better make
The best of it
While you can
Enjoy life
Skip the plans
And sure you'll feel like the world's got their eyes on you
Any mistake, will be top news
Embrace the target
Love the pressure
Make do with what you got
Because

You're the golden boy
And your dad went through the same thing
Trying to build a legacy
Your sister always feels not pretty enough
But you tell her you love her no matter what
And your brother feels so alone
So you call him on your phone
And say:

"You're a golden boy
And I feel the same way
Every passing day
The expectations weigh you down
But I
I know
That you were always there for me
And you
Just know
I would do the same gladly.
We can do this together
We can embrace the pressure
'Cause being the golden boy ain't no easy one
But let's make it fun."

And the speaker is silent for a little while
And you're about to hang up and redial
But then he speaks again suddenly
You listen intently...
"Little brother?
Kindness is definitely your legacy."
 
A piece I wrote a while ago and then touched it up. Idk how I feel about it. I like the concept, but I feel like I didn't do it justice.
What do y'all think?

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5 Comments
  • outoftheblue

    This is so good and I'm sure it resonates with a ton of people. You perfectly captured how people feel when they have a lot of expectations


    7 months ago
  • birthdaycandles

    One little criticism: Maybe consider making it a bit shorter to maintain the reader's interest, try to pick out what lines speak the message you're trying to portray to the reader and focus on developing the emotions and feelings related to that, if that makes sense lol


    7 months ago
  • birthdaycandles

    Why does this feel like the beginning of a Melanie Martinez song? Lol. I liked the loose rhymes throughout, helped drive the piece on and added to the hurricane of feelings. Neat work!


    7 months ago
  • Mishthi Sharma

    Absolutely amazing! A fresh concept, filled with emotions, rhythmic touch (sorry,I'm obsessed with rhymes :P) everything is just perfect.


    7 months ago
  • ElsaRee

    Did you say you didn't do it justice?? No way! This is amazing!


    7 months ago