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Message to Readers
dedicated to the friend I parted ways with before high school
I still think about you sometimes <3
I could totally relate to this! Everything was so raw and personal that I felt like I was intruding, yet I could also find myself experiencing these emotions. Hopefully you and I can learn to live and write about the heartbreak of a lost friend.
maybe more personal scenes of your past? i really liked them, and i think it’d be cool to have more. specific details, that is.
you really have a talent, jo! i have a lot to learn from you. i think some parts of this could use more clarification for the reader since it’s very personal, and could be made a bit more clearer. the emotions were so raw and bittersweet, and it was a painful type of good read! amazing work! p.s. thank you so much for loving my series. i saw your comment and your shout out to me on your profile. it means the world. p.p.s there’s this account called Writers of The World where you can submit other people’s poems (and your own) to be nominated for a monthly Must Reads! i nominated your Wheel of Endless Gold for April! hopefully your great work shines through.