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Made some changes! PLEASE let me know what you think! Any feedback would literally mean the world to me! Also, still looking for the perfect title!! REVIEWS PLEASE!!!!! <33
This moved me so much. The lines are all so carefully planned, so carefully tailored to reflect the tone. I love the rule of three that you implemented into your work, for example, "unstoppable, unbeatable, at the top of the world".
I personally think the title is perfect. I do think that there is some repetition, though, and I highlighted it in your piece. I don't know if that's what you meant to write, but if it is, I apologize in advance.
THIS IS SUCH A GOOD PIECE! When I read it the first time, I was just absolutely speechless. You're such a good writer, and you're able to convey these ideas so well, all the while drawing readers in with moving language. Thank you for creating this masterpiece :)