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The comparisons are amAZING (and precise). Nature to a symphony!! It's a very "natural" piece where you go into detail about human biology (at least for me hahaha), as if you're not scared to get your hands dirty. Great job!!
I gather it's your style, but I think it would be more pleaseant to the reader's eye if sentences began with capital letters. Otherwise, it just seems the sentence will never end, which is not something very... attractive? in a piece.
About plastic consuming Prometheus: Prometheus sacrifices himself for Humanity, which contradicts the fact that the world/you is being killed. It's a really good thought, but I think it's something to adapt. As if Prometheus had perished/failed in his noble mission (like not even immortals are above the destruction of the planet) - just an idea
AMAZING piece about the environment!! Looking forward to seeing what you'll write next!