ElsaRee

India

PERCABETH FAN..
15
Straight
Leo
Aspires to be a writer
Daughter of ZEUS
Gryffindor
LOVES reading
as free as wind
FIERCE LOVER
Member of the (unofficial) AHPU (Abnormal Height Peoples' Union)
Desperate Daydreamer
Proud Indian

Message to Readers

THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU, for the likes, comments,reviews and the compliments you guys provided for'My Own Peter Pan'..They meant the WORLD to me..LOVE YOU ALL..<3 hope you guys like the second part also. I'm planning on a third part (perhaps a fourth also) for this story-like poem, so please, please, PLEASE let me know it the comments.And I would be really grateful to get reviews...If you haven't read the first part, please do check it out..Thanks again..Lots of love <3 And do participate in the contest I'm holding as well <3

Peter, dear Peter

May 9, 2020

FREE WRITING

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"Oh.."
I breathe,
Heart full,
Eyes shining,
Trembling,
"Did you just say.."
I begin,
"Yes,I did"
He says,
I sit up,
On by bed,
Clutch the grills,
Of my window,
That prison,
Squeeze tight,
Fingers hurt,
"Peter.."
"Yes''
He puts his hand,
Over mine,
My tears spill,
He wipes them,
"Don't",
No reply,
"You left",
I mutter,
"I returned",
He smiles,
"You said you won't",
"But I did",
He says,
"Since I love you".
I stare at him,
Words fail me,
"Me too",
I whisper,
He takes my hand,
Tinkerbell giggles,
I don't care,
Nor does he,
Nothing matters,
Nothing exists,
Just his twinkling eyes,
I grip his hand,
He squeezes mine,
We say nothing,
Just stare at each other,
"I'm yours, too",
I manage at last.
He smiles again,
"Thank you".

 
This is the continuation of another poem of mine.If you haven't read it, please, please do.
"My own Peter Pan"

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18 Comments
  • Emi

    Aw, this is so sweet and kind of romantic. I always loved the film Peter Pan, and the book too!


    4 months ago
  • Cheshire Cat

    Q&A answers are up
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/164692/version/324504


    5 months ago
  • Mishthi Sharma

    Gorgeous!


    5 months ago
  • min⁷

    Hey there @ElsaRee, thank you for wishing me and early Eid. It means a lot! By the way I loved your piece. I'm a huge Peter Pan fan.


    5 months ago
  • Eleanor Richardson

    Absolutely magical! Honestly, you should be so proud of this.


    6 months ago
  • bambiamby

    THIS IS SO BEAUTIFULLLL!!! this sequel is amazing and so heart warming!! also thank you so much for your sweet comments! they really encourage me to keep writing :)


    6 months ago
  • Madelyn (Carolina Girl)

    Ahhhhh this one is so good too! I loved this! Hitting me in the feels man.


    6 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    this was the wholesome content I needed today XD amazing piece


    6 months ago
  • mia_:)

    Replying: Thank you so much for the supportive comments! You never fail to make me smile! I'm glad you like it :)


    6 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Replying: Hey! No problem! I can see you becoming big in the near future. You're good at what you do, and there's no need to thank me lol


    6 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Ee! I love it just as much! The emotion is so strong and powerful!


    6 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Hey! I republished and deleted the version of the piece which you commented one but wow this is an amazing piece. Peter Pan is one of my favourite childhood series/books/movies and 'Lost Boy' is a song I love so you captivated me from the title. I love how the piece draws you in its has an element of mystery but so much adorable romance. I quite like how you acknowledge tinker-bell in one of the lines I think it creates a bit of context for the piece too. Each line is short so you can absorb each piece and its meaning and each word flows and fits perfectly. An amazing piece and I'm excited to read more.


    6 months ago
  • Ghoulgirl2020 (#Queenie's Halloween | I have been called Cool before if you know what I mean) ;)

    WOAH! PETER!!! But is the girl Wendy? Could it be? PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL! AND SOON!!! I don't know how long I can wait...[sob]


    6 months ago
  • Charisse Marison

    Also, I like the nickname! It's adorable :3
    And great authors like you deserve all the compliments in the world, so it's no problem <3


    6 months ago
  • Charisse Marison

    So cute! I love their relationship! You're such a talented writer <3


    6 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    This is gorgeous, so beautiful. Also, I want to thank you for all your sweet comments, I appreciate them! <3


    6 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    I loved it so much!! It's great.


    6 months ago
  • Juniper

    I absolutely LOVE this. It’s so, so sweet!! Awesome job Elsa!!! :)


    6 months ago