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feedback is a banquet and i'm the starved wanderer (please!)
Peer Review
The descriptions lend a very crisp and defined take on the four seasons. I can see it in my head, and it's absolutely beautiful. Another thing is that these emotions expressed here seem to feel almost 'exclusive' to the season at hand, so it makes it sound all the more special.
~Your perspective on each of the seasons is absolutely gorgeous but I wonder if you could weave some other perspectives into your stanzas for each season so that it seems more layered? I'm pretty sure in fall and summer you allude to the school year? If that's true, maybe some notes of that in winter? ~Very VERY minor nitpick: sometimes there are 'extra' conjunctions. For example, the line 'yet spring comes like a breath of fresh air' could've done without the 'yet' at the beginning. Otherwise, your placing of the conjunctions does well for the piece and allows it to flow as smoothly as it does.
Reviewer Comments
It would be the understatement of the year to say I had a NIGHTMARE choosing which piece of yours to review simply because they're all so good! Even on this one, I felt like everything I said was inconsequential and unimportant because you did so much right. Take my words with a grain of salt because all I was doing was taking nitpicks and expanding on them. Your pieces are a major guilty pleasure of mine, keep it up!