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I think the line "Then I sang and danced among the brilliant hues of the clouds" would've been great as "And then I sang and danced among the brilliance" to emphasize the movement of your life, it's wonderful either way.
Beginnings don't have to be edges, it could've been to scraps cut from the same cloth, but different stitches.