ElsaRee

India

PERCABETH FAN..
15
Leo
Aspires to be a writer
Daughter of ZEUS
Gryffindor
LOVES reading
as free as wind
FIERCE LOVER
Winter's girl
Member of the (unofficial) AHPU (Abnormal Height Peoples' Union)
Desperate Daydreamer
Proud Indian

Message to Readers

Hope you guys like it! Please let me know your opinion. If I get a good response, I would like to publish a second part for this story-like poem..(perhaps even third! )So please let me know...<3

My own Peter Pan

May 2, 2020

FREE WRITING

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 I lie in my bed for hours,
Can't sleep,
I keep gazing out,
At the dark night,
Lit by spots of light,
Heart heavy,
Eyes wet,
Vision foggy,
I lay awake,
A tiny sparkle moves,
Fireflies?
No.
This can't be....
Can it?
"Tinkerbell?",I whisper,
More sparkles fly,
''He is here", she says.
"Peter?'' I ask,
I'm stunned,
My heart aches,
Eyes bleed,
Mouth dries,
"Who else?",he whispers,
His laughter quiet.
My heart lightens,
I sigh,
"You..''
I can't continue,
My voice cracks,
Throat too tight.
"Thought I'd not return?"
"You said so, Peter, you.."
"I thought you knew me better".
No answer.
He smiles,
I don't,
But my heart melts,
"Oh, Peter, Peter.."
Tinkerbell giggles,
"You and your Peter.."
"My P-Peter?" I ask,
Voice fails again,
"Yes, your Peter",
He sighs, "Only yours".



 

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20 Comments
  • And_The_Stars_Laughed

    I love your tone -- you've made this poem so magical and vivid! The way you've formatted it is seamless, its so fun to read and definitely reminds me of when I was younger and I imagined flying with Peter Pan! :)


    about 2 months ago
  • Madelyn (Carolina Girl)

    Why did this hit me in the feels!? ahhh! You have a way with words. This is amazing.


    2 months ago
  • Princess Maria

    When I was little I used to wish Peter Pan would fly up to my bedroom window and take me to Neverland so we could fight pirates together. This literally reminds me of my childhood dreams. Beautiful!


    2 months ago
  • Coolgirl2020

    Beautiful


    2 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    ADORABLE! MAGNIFICENT! CAPTIVATING! There aren't enough words to describe how I'm feeling. It's just so gosh darn cute!


    2 months ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    This is so cute!! I really loved this piece! Reading it made me smile :))


    2 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    oh my goodness, this is so adorable. this made my day XD love the concept and the layout as well


    2 months ago
  • bambiamby

    replying: stupid? STUPID?! i think you meant to say 'AMAZING.' and no problem, they're a delight to read, keep writing! :p


    2 months ago
  • bambiamby

    i had a smile while reading this :) so sweet. love it


    2 months ago
  • ★ white mountains ★

    reply: aww thx! haha I don't mind at all but I think I'm going to put a name in my bio for reference lol :)


    2 months ago
  • ek503

    Love this :)


    2 months ago
  • Charisse Marison

    Aw, this is sooo cute! Love it! Would love to see a second part <3


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Reply: Aw, thanks! <3


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Reply: Aw, love you too, Elsa! <3


    2 months ago
  • Juniper

    Aww this is so sweet, I love this!!!


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Replying: And thanks AGAIN! Wow, thank you for your support, I mean it. I appreciate it a lot <3


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Replying: Aw, thanks! <3


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Replying: You're welcome!


    2 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    This is so beautiful. Also, thank you for reading my pieces. And your comments are so sweet and motivational <3


    2 months ago
  • Tushar Mandhan

    It's good concept. I would love to read a second part.


    2 months ago