asteria

United States

don't settle for the mundane;

chaos is far more intriguing.

Message to Readers

i know i've been absent for a long while, it seems i'm sporadic with my time on write the world lately, but i appreciate every bit of support from you readers, and i hope to support you all as best i can :)

i tried a bit of a new style on this poem, i'm learning a lot from my creative writing class. tell me what you think of it!

philosopher

May 1, 2020

FREE WRITING

11

i see god in the white flash
of my sister's teeth, and in the pattern of wiggling
squares in the bottom of the pool she splashes into -
not an ounce of hesitation resides in that taught, slim body.

and i see god in the stretching
of my brother's mouth when the streetlamps flicker on,
and in the ever-violent adieu of the sun from our skies.

and maybe, with every beat of my heart,
i see god in the crash of your tongue against mine.

 
~asteria

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6 Comments
  • inanutshell

    the title fits so well... also really love the impact of the last stanza.


    4 months ago
  • Dmoral

    beautiful piece as always.

    "i see god in..."
    interesting concept and stanza starter, but i kinda like it.

    "and in the ever-violent adieu of the sun from our skies."
    favorite lines.

    p.s
    i miss ya girl, best wishes


    5 months ago
  • Aerowashington

    It provokes thoughts of the world around us, how magic is in everything going on around us alll the time without us knowing it. We go through the day and just accept all the insane things in our life because it’s actually happening, but it’s all magical


    5 months ago
  • Aerowashington

    Wow, that took a few reads to fully appreciate the beauty of the poem, superb job as always!


    5 months ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    Absolutely AMAZING!I loved it so much!


    5 months ago
  • bambiamby

    w o w . just wow. each stanza is so perfectly phrased and i-- don't even have any words.i love this so much!


    5 months ago