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It might suit you well to define imperialism somewhere in your introduction. Everyone has a vague understanding of what imperialism is but a definition will help a reader understand how the outside examples you use in your essay relate to imperialism as you define it.
Great essay overall. Great support of thesis with a myriad of examples. It would do well to try to work on slightly more clear and concise language. Additionally, how personal views on imperialism were not addressed.