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feedback would be wonderful! (please check out the painting that inspired this!)
When I first this piece, I thought it was amazing. Then I read the footnote, Googled the painting, and was completely blown away by your ability to capture and interpret its beauty so eloquently! The way tied everything in, including your metaphors and analogies, made me love it even more.
You begin this poem in past tense and end in present tense. This was probably intentional, but if it wasn't, I'm just pointing that out. I honestly can't think of any way to improve this piece; it flows beautifully and creates such vivid imagery (even without seeing the painting!).
I would love to read more of your writing. Great work!