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Message to Readers
small-town blues & big city dreams
How smoothly and easily this poem went from amusing to painfully realistic to making me smile again. I really enjoyed this poem, the lowercase felt fitting. I definitely admire the easy syntax here, I could all but hear your tone and speech as i read. I really enjoy the rhythm here and how realistic it is. It's not stunted or stumbling. It makes me think of lying on your back on your bedroom floor and rambling to your best friend.
Hmmm. I hesitate to give too much advice here. Poetry is deeply subjective. I really do enjoy how real this is, and maybe a few sensory details would further cement the feeling here? Its a very immersive poem, so anything the ground the reader further would be great!
I really enjoy everything you've written and this poem was definitely one of my favorites on WtW.
You've yet to disappoint and I look forward to seeing more from you