Bushra Shaikh

India

Stressed, blessed & tea obsessed ! ♥️
Unsaid emotions

Just a girl !

April 25, 2020

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I'm just a normal girl,
Destined for an average life,
For meaningless experiences
And dismal opportunities.
I fell in love
With my silence.
The way 
I kept
Things hidden
Inside me.
Like eyes 
In the crack 
Of a door.
Lost in my love,
Somehow I defined normality !

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8 Comments
  • Emi

    I love the line, "like eyes in the crack of a door." It's such a clever and unique simile.


    about 2 months ago
  • Bhavya's Treasure (Bewitching Tombstone #Queenie's Halloween)

    "Like eyes
    In the crack
    Of a door. " Beautiful!
    And your profile picture... I just love it Bushra!!! <3


    3 months ago
  • Jasmine khawar

    It's so lovely <3


    4 months ago
  • ~wildflower~

    Love it!! Well done on taking on this important message so well :)


    4 months ago
  • ElsaRee

    WOOOW!!


    4 months ago
  • Juniper

    This is really good!!!


    6 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Gorgeous!


    6 months ago
  • OpalDove

    I like the message. I used to do the method of super short lines, chopping up sentences like nuts. but then i realized that if i wanted to keep moving ahead, and getting better, i needed to get out of that habit. and i'm not fully out of it yet, thats for sure, but i've gotten a lot better. if you get out of the habit early, it might be easier to transition. Idk. just try to avoid short, choppy lines. also, stanzas are gonna be your SAVIOR later down the line. I used to make my poems one, big, long stanza, but once i stopped doing that, i was able to improve my technique a LOT. just some advice. :)
    also jsyk this poem is good. not saying its bad, just giving some advice.


    6 months ago