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United Arab Emirates

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far too nonchalant about things i should probably care about

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reviews pLeAsE. reviews without anything constructive are honestly a waste of your time, more than anything. be harsh or whatever when you critique me, but please do.

as for comments, they help a lot lol so if you drop a few, it would be highly appreciated.

i create a man of my dreams

April 26, 2020

FREE WRITING

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man of wombs and wounds; 
you carry three generations and 
a satchel of boyhood dreams 
on shoulders fashioned 
from yew and steel. there is a wake 
of magnanimous ennui in those 
wiry clavicles, lamentable, 
mischievous bones. you said you 
liked to shed your skin at midnight, 
you, automobile child, 
pastor of yellow streetlights, 
apologies whispered between 
unrelenting legs. all the world 
and his sardonic musing cannot 
save your indolent misery; follies 
crafted fastidiously, the bitter-saccharine 
irony in setting your pain on fire, 
and blooming it in 
somebody else.


 


idk wot this is :)

 

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6 Comments

  • Dmoral

    "you carry three generations and / a satchel of boyhood dreams "
    favorite lines

    "you said you / liked to shed your skin at midnight, "
    this line gave me chills

    breathtaking piece!


    12 months ago

  • PureHeart

    Beautiful language choices. I love this poem so much! Good job ^^


    12 months ago

  • Cheshire Cat

    love it, it is so romantic


    12 months ago

  • jaii

    this is gorgeous. that ending is *chef kisses*


    12 months ago

  • purplepanache

    there is resilience about this poem and yet it's so profoundly sad. absolutely love it!


    12 months ago

  • CrazyNinjaKid

    holyyyyy this is so good.


    about 1 year ago