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Part 2 anyone??
Originally here: If it's bad, let me know. I'm so uneasy about this piece. I worked on this for a while but like, it took forever and everything I wrote didn't seem to live up to my expectations. So yeah, ANY feedback is welcome. Also, sorry it's so long-so, if you read it all *claps*
Also, title ideas----greatly appreciated. I'm currently bouncing off a lot
To be honest, I wasn't expecting much because so often people use mythology instead of being creative and coming up with their own story. But I really loved this piece! Your voice is distinct, and intoxicating, just like the siren's. You create a world of both magic and imbalance. Such an amazing piece of fiction!!
I would expand more on WHY Bastet is drawn to the Caller. Do the Caller's powers still influence her even though she is a God? Or is it something else? And then why the caller is drawn to Bastet- her power, grace, something distinct? The setting and story are so well described, the only thing that should be added is the character's own feelings and observations.
I really do love this piece- good job and keep writing! For the title- I think something with "Imbalance" would be good because it's such a good part of the ending.