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Taking Back the Crown | #songsoflife prompt 1

May 30, 2020

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You could die
And my people would rejoice
My nation, my homeland
The throne you sit on
The throne you stole
Would display your lifeless body
Slumped against it
And there would be cheering in the streets of my home
I will be the savior, the hero-- 
No, not the hero
The legend
I've worked the skin off my back
I've perfected my finishing blow
I've taken off my hat to make room for the crown
I've come so far
I'm so close 
I can taste it
Welcome to the end, King of Saya
You're about to die
Your dynasty decapitated
Your dynasty made of fools, liars, and thieves
My whole life has led up to this moment
My whole life was meant for this
My whole life is for those who died
Those who sacrificed, those who I miss
I am Cesare
I'm so much more than royal
I am the necessary evil
I am the one who will bring peace
I am the one who holds your sorry life in my hands
I am the one holding you at the edge of this wall
The one who will end you
To put an end to the suffering
My people's suffering
Are you scared?
I can only imagine how that feels
Once you die
I will be at peace 
Won't I?
Once I kill you
I will be satisfied
Right?
After all, this is why I'm alive
I am alive when I should've died!
Why why why
Their bodies lay lifeless on still dirt
Those who were murdered
Thrown off cliffs
Drowned in rivers
Stabbed in the back
Just to protect me
All while I keep breathing
I keep living
Because I am supposed to overthrow you
Dispose you
And I will gladly do the deed
I will avenge them
And watch you bleed
If you didn't know, by now
Yes
I see the crown on your head
And it's mine
And I see what's mine and take it
My whole life has led up to this moment
My whole life was meant for this
This is for my people
This is for ME
They are gone
But I still live on
Their bodies burned in the blaze
But I was snatched from the fire
Perhaps when your body is still
Still as my heart
Cold as my blood
I will finally smile
I will finally have peace



 
This is based on a story I'm brainstorming, and written while listening to "Emperor's New Clothes" by Panic! at the Disco (I sneaked in some lyrics)
Cesare has issues guys. 

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9 Comments
  • RemovedUser1

    Oops, I meant to say “We Christian girls”


    4 months ago
  • RemovedUser1

    Wow, that got dark. And again with the second person! You really nail that, I’ll have to try that out sometime.
    Also, it’s a little unsettling how you come up with such dark characters, but it’s also amazing to read XD. I also like how you don’t tell the whole story, so it’s kinda shrouded in mystery, which makes a cool effect.
    And yeah, I’m glad ya Christian girls can stick together.


    4 months ago
  • sunny.v

    I LOVE EMPEROR’S NEW CLOTHES. welcome to the end of eras hehe. lovely work!


    5 months ago
  • Quarkoala

    This is one of those revolts (if it actually happens, but not if the narrator fails) where one ruler/group of rulers overthrows another, and people are happy, but it just turns into another dynasty like the previous one.

    (Not related) I couldn't find your piece "Three is a Magic Number." Can you give me the link?


    5 months ago
  • Currently Unavailable

    Great piece! I really like this.
    Replying: the inspiration came from a prompt on Just A Memory’s contest. You should def check it out. Here’s the link!

    https://www.writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/166515/version/328419
    Also, thanks for reading! <3


    6 months ago
  • ElsaRee

    It is an amazing piece!!


    6 months ago
  • Doodleninja

    submitted to Eleanor M's #songsoflife contest:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/162720/version/336155
    (go check it out, it's awesome!!!)


    6 months ago
  • delete

    OUTSTANDING! You have a great sense of emotion that you thrust onto the reader through your dark language, using words like ‘cold’, ‘decapitated’ and ‘murdered’. I also love how the whole piece is a run-on poem representing firing up of the speaker’s anger towards the king, all emotion and instinct taking over him, rather than rationality, an impulse to protect the people.


    6 months ago
  • WhispersOfGray

    Once again, you knock me off my feet. Another brilliant piece!


    7 months ago