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This piece is a mess.
Any and all feedback appreciated!
This piece really was an enjoyable romance/comedy piece in the minds of children. I loved watching how it ended which was a twist but I liked it a load. Also Coach Moore's addition to the story was an awesome twist!! Grammar is super as well!
Love to see a little bit more character development on Alice. Over the years, how does her character develop? Just a little more insight to this, does Alice ever consider them being together at times, when has she felt herself falling for him but pulls herself back because of her mothers words. What hardships has Alice yearned through her adolescents example: Another idea also to make it even more developed is that Alice's mother passed away, and those are the words that were in a letter to Alice along with many other things. Maybe Alice wants to fall in love with Riley but doesn't for the fear of betraying her mother?
Literally awesome :)