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I really liked this chapter! You did a really nice job building Jack and Malteen's relationship (I totally ship them), and left it on a cliffhanger! Awesome!
Something I noticed os that you stray away from commas and make separate sentences. This can make the writing choppy and difficult to read. You should try to connect more thoughts instead of making separate sentences. Lastly, you make each action a sentence, but you can put two or three actions into a single sentence. It makes it more interesting because every sentence doesn't start with "He did this".
About that thing in the footnotes about your browser crashing, I'd recommend writing your drafts in google drive, and then copying it to WTW. Google drive autosaves, so that might help you again.