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Hey, I'd be delighted if you took a minute to review my piece. I want to know how you interpreted it, the mood it had, as well as what you think the tone is. If you spot any errors or inconsistencies, feel free to point them out.
This poem made an overall impression on me of a dream.
Maybe make the title more present in the poem, using comparisons.
flush its remains down the drain!"
So dramatic; a turning point in the poem/dream. Also, great use of the word "Thing."
And good job using the phrase "flush its remains down the drain!" instead of "erase it!"
Keep the dreaminess, just add more.
I interpret this as a dream, and the title, a metaphor for the person having the dream, but in the dream, not in real life.
By the way, sorry I couldn't get to this before the contest deadline.